Your writing is a good start, but there are a few things you can improve:
• Sentence structure: try to make your sentences shorter and simpler. This will make them easier to understand.
• Grammar: pay attention to small mistakes like verb agreement and word choice.
• Vocabulary: use clear and simple words. Instead of saying "good/professional level," you can just say "professional level."
One part of your text that might be a bit unclear is: "but also to feel indentified by this person, like an idol." Here's a suggestion to make it clearer:
• Instead of "feel indentified," you might mean "feel connected to" or "look up to." This can help convey your idea more clearly.
• The phrase "like an idol" is a good start, but you could expand on what you mean. For example, you could say "someone they admire and respect."
Here's an example of how you could rephrase it:
To get proper feedback, one should ask someone with experience and a professional level. Additionally, it helps if this person is someone you admire and respect, like an idol.
This way, your idea is clearer and easier to understand.
• Punctuation: use commas correctly to separate ideas and lists.
• Formality: informal writing, try to avoid using phrases like "is going to." Instead, you can use the future tense directly, like "will." This makes your writing sound more formal.