Hello Jade
You used key vocabulary from the glossary well, including "air pollution," "waste management," "renewable energies," "carbon footprint," and "sustainable practices." Your writing also includes clear, practical examples of environmental solutions, like promoting public transport and installing solar panels.
Your argument is well-structured, as you connect the environmental impact of sports to possible solutions. To make your writing even stronger, try using more precise transitions between ideas. For example, instead of "In addition," you could say "Beyond energy considerations" to create a clearer connection.
Some sentences follow a similar pattern, so varying your sentence structure would improve the flow. You might also consider combining ideas to make your writing more engaging. At the end, specifying which "sustainable practices" fans could adopt would make your conclusion more concrete and leave a stronger impression.
You used key vocabulary from the glossary well, including "air pollution," "waste management," "renewable energies," "carbon footprint," and "sustainable practices." Your writing also includes clear, practical examples of environmental solutions, like promoting public transport and installing solar panels.
Your argument is well-structured, as you connect the environmental impact of sports to possible solutions. To make your writing even stronger, try using more precise transitions between ideas. For example, instead of "In addition," you could say "Beyond energy considerations" to create a clearer connection.
Some sentences follow a similar pattern, so varying your sentence structure would improve the flow. You might also consider combining ideas to make your writing more engaging. At the end, specifying which "sustainable practices" fans could adopt would make your conclusion more concrete and leave a stronger impression.