With the articles and videos studied, we can see that sport can have a significant positive impact on the environment. They have a march of improvement. Because nowadays sport has a very negative impact on the environment. The tourism that sport brings causes damage. But innovations followed by all could help the longevity of sports and the planet. For this, politics should already be tougher and in accordance which each sport in the world and adapted depending on practises. For me this is the first and most important step.
Hello Sarah
Your analysis shows a strong understanding of how sports affect the environment, highlighting both the negative impacts and the opportunities for positive change. You also made a thoughtful point about the role of policies in improving sustainability in sports.
Your recognition that different sports may need specific environmental strategies adds depth to your argument.
However, there are a few areas to refine:
- Sentence structure: some sentences need clearer phrasing. For example, "They have a march of improvement" is unclear—try rewording it as "They are making progress toward improvement."
- Grammar: pay attention to subject-verb agreement and prepositions. For instance, "Politics should already be tougher and in accordance which each sport" should be "Policies should be tougher and in accordance with each sport."
- Organization: your ideas will be more effective if structured logically. Consider first discussing current environmental challenges in sports before moving on to solutions and recommendations.
- Natural language: using more natural phrasing, such as "based on our readings and videos" instead of "with the articles and videos studied," will improve fluency.